Writing Sample

The writing I chose that showed my best work this trimester was my character writing. My character writing is about two girls named Amy Walker and Desiree Jones who are complete opposites and their parents are getting married. My story shows how the girls start out hating each other but throughout the story they start to like each other.

The Wedding’s Off

I absolutely hate Desiree Jones. She is this over-enthusiastic, warm, bubbly girl that bothers the crap outta me. I absolutely can’t stand her and if I’m gonna have to live with her; I think I might jump off a cliff into a pit of piranhas. She’s got this gorgeous chocolate brown hair that falls perfectly off her shoulders and those dazzling sapphire blue eyes of hers make me wanna puke. And don’t even get me started on her blinding neon clothes they too make me want to hurl.

I can’t believe our parents are getting married in three weeks.  I mean seriously how could my dad do this to me?  It’s like he’s forcing me and Desiree to get along. Has he ever met Desiree? She’s like a rainbow explosion and if that isn’t bad enough I have to share my room with her too?  I swear if she touches anything of mine, I’m gonna sever her fingers off one by one.  From downstairs, I can hear the movers helping them move in and that’s when it hits me: This is really happening they’re getting married.  

I’m about to start writing in my notebook when my eyes are greeted with an electrifying rainbow who is now my new roommate, Desiree.

“Hello, I can’t believe of all the people my mom could’ve married, she chose your dad.”

“Hi to you too I guess. Okay before you settle into my room here are some ground rules. Don’t touch my stuff, stay to your side of the room, and don’t bother me.”

“Well aren’t you a pocketful of sunshine.”

When I go down to the kitchen to get a snack I’m greeted by a bunch of boxes stacked like building blocks. Just another reminder that Desiree is here ruining my life; great!  Bringing my snack up with me, I return to what I think was my room. “Ahhhhhh!!!!!! What did you do to my room? I thought I made it clear not to touch my stuff!”

“You never said I couldn’t decorate your room.” Desiree replied.

“I don’t care, this is my room and you aren’t going to redecorate it!”

“Fine, I’ll take it down after I find my box of clothes and change. Gosh you don’t have to freak out.”

“No, take it down now!”

“Fine, gosh someone woke up on the wrong side of the bed.”

As Desiree takes down her blinding multi-colored neon lanterns and removes her electric pink plush rug along with her hot pink bean bag; I fall back onto my bed, exasperated I start texting my best friend, Ruby. Amy: “Can u believe it she just rainbowfied my room.”

Ruby: “I can’t believe u have to share a room with her.”

 Amy: “Ikr? I mean this is my room wat was she thinking when she redecorated it?”

Ruby: “Idk Amy but she’s bad news u should just scare the crap outta her so she’ll beg her mom to leave.”

Amy: “I would, but then my dad would just tell me to be nice to her. Text u later I should defend my territory before Little Miss Rainbow explodes her colors somewhere else”

Ruby: “K bye”

“Who are you texting?” Desiree asks.

I look up from my phone and find that my room has been returned back to normal.

“Obviously not you.”

“Gosh, are you always like this?”

“Like what?”

“Never mind. Look, I don’t like the idea of our parents getting married either so you can stop taking your anger out on me.”

“Whatever.”

Giving me an infuriated look, Desiree stalks outta the room. Satisfied, I pull out my notebook and add:

 Amy’s Do’s and Don’ts

Do	Don’t
Defend your territory	Redecorate your room
Annoy/Scare Little Miss Rainbow	Give in to Little Miss Rainbow

 

Later, after dinner, I retreat back to my room to read. When I get there, I find a note on my desk from Desiree. The bubbly script said, “We need to talk, meet me in the library in 20.”

Unsure what to do, I ignore the note and settle on my bed and start to read my murder mystery. Twenty minutes later, I get a text; thinking it’s Ruby, I check my phone, but instead it’s a text from Desiree saying, Desiree: “Come to the library now!” How the heck did she get my number? Thinking it was my dad I slowly make my way down to the library which is on the other side of the house.

I wonder why the heck I bothered answering to Desiree after what she did to my room earlier, but before I can change my mind and go back to the comfort of my room, I step inside the library, and standing right there in the middle of the library is Desiree herself.

“I knew you’d come.” Desiree says way too happily.

“And why is that so?”

“I don’t know, I just got a feeling you’d come.”

“Well consider yourself lucky, you’ve got five minutes. Talk!”

“Five minutes?”

“You want me to make that three?”

“Nope. Anyways I’ve gathered you here today­-

“Dude you sound like you’re giving a speech now can you cut to the chase? You’re down to four minutes.”

“Okay, fine. So I have an idea on how to sabotage the wedding.”

“Wait. What? You’re going to sabotage our parent’s wedding? And I thought I was the evil one.”

“Yeah, if we sabotage the wedding, then I don’t have to live with you no offense.”

“None taken I don’t want to live with you either.”

“Anyways, we should totally make our parents hate each other so they won’t get married.”

“I can’t believe I’m about to say this, but I think that’s a great idea.”

“Okay so what do we want to do first?”

“We can plant bad things about them. Like how my dad absolutely hates it when people unalphabetize the books in here.”

“Good, we can mess up the order of the books then I can have my mom fetch me a book from here then frame her for messing up the books.”

“Great, then I can tell my dad that I can’t find where any of the books are, and then he’ll come in here and find all the books messed up. Okay one parent down one more to go. So what bothers your mom the most?”

“Bad cooks.”

“Oh that’ll be easy.”

“But I thought your dad was a gourmet chef.”

“Oh he is, but it’s not that hard to sabotage food. All you have to do is add too much of something and the dish is ruined.”

“Cool.”

“Operation Wedding’s Off is in action. I guess that makes us PIC’s.”

“PIC’s?”

“Yeah. Partners In Crime.”

“Oh.”

“Yeah. Race you back to the room first one that gets there gets the bathroom first. On you mark get set go!”

Desiree dashes out of the room. When she’s gone I pull the book Doomed off the shelf and the book shelf slides to the side revealing a secret passage that leads straight to my closet; which thankfully I don’t have to share with her because I have two closets one on her side of my room and the one on my side which is connected to the library.

I arrive there with five minutes to spare so I check my phone for my texts. There’s one from Ruby and one from my boyfriend Josh, I decide to check the one from Ruby first it says,

Ruby: “U haven’t texted me back yet. R u dead? Did Little Miss Rainbow kill u with one of her million watt smiles?”

I text her back, Amy: “Nope sabotaging the wedding. Text u later she’s coming.”

Desiree walks into the room looking exhausted like she just ran a marathon and says, “How’d you get here so fast?”

“Magic.”

“Who were you texting?”

“Your mom.”

“Really?”

“No. Why would I text your mom when she’s standing right behind you?”

Desiree quickly spins around to find no one behind her.

“So I guess since I beat you, I get the bathroom first.”

“Yeah go ahead; I have to unpack my clothes anyways.”

When it’s Desiree’s turn to shower I crawl under my covers and look at the text from Josh. It says, Josh: “Hey having fun with Desiree?”

I text him back, Amy: “No she redecorated my room earlier and it looked like a neon explosion.”

Josh: “Haha. I’ve gotta see this.”

Amy: “Too late I made her put it back to the way it was.”

Josh: “Really y?”

Amy: “Must I explain?”

Josh: “Haha, no.”

Amy: “She’s back text ya later.”

Josh: “Okay.”

When Desiree comes out of the bathroom I leap out of bed.

“Oh I almost forgot to feed my pets. You wanna help?”

“Sure.”

I walk over to one of my two mini fridges and pull out a bag of mice frozen and lifeless.

“What is that?”

“Jade‘s dinner.”

“What does Jade eat?”

“Mice.”

“No really what does Jade eat?”

“Mice.”

“Y-you weren’t kidding about the mice?”

“Nope.”

“You said pets. How many pets do you have?”

“Only two.”

What’s your other pet’s name then?”

“Fuzzball.”

“And what does Fuzzball eat?”

“Crickets.”

“Eek!”

I take the cover off of Jade’s cage and drop a mouse in there for her. Then, after making sure her cage is closed tight I show Desiree Fuzzball and feed him his daily ration of crickets. I go off to the bathroom to wash my hands and come back to find Desiree lying in her bed staring at the empty black walls of my room.

I ask her a question I never thought I’d ever ask her, “Do you have a boyfriend?”

“No. Do you?” Desiree replied.

“Yeah Josh Watson. How do you not have a boyfriend? You look like you came outta a magazine?”

“I’ve turn down every guy that’s asked me out because I don’t like any of them.”

“Oh.”

“Yeah.”

“Is there anyone you like in particular?”

“Well, there’s that guy who is running for student body president.”

“Who? Asher Colby?”

“Yup.”

“Oh.”

After that, we don’t talk we just lie there. Twenty minutes later, Desiree is sound asleep so I decide to text Josh back…

 

My writing shows character because it shows the character's personalities. My writing also shows how the two girls interact with each other. Such as how Amy really makes it clear that she doesn't like Desiree. I also made Amy really sarcastic and Desiree really gullible which builds most of the girls' conversations. Me and my partner made Desiree really bubbly and outgoing which makes Amy really uncomfortable which leads to her lashing out at Desiree.